Comments on: Titan http://www.rmfo-blogs.com/daniel/2009/11/30/titan/ It's not you, it's me. Wed, 27 Jul 2011 19:07:52 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: Astian http://www.rmfo-blogs.com/daniel/2009/11/30/titan/comment-page-1/#comment-33795 Astian Wed, 27 Oct 2010 20:56:20 +0000 http://www.rmfo-blogs.com/daniel/2009/11/30/titan/#comment-33795 Oh, and to offset my praise, a critique. In the last stanza, the iceberg line (which I assume refers to the Titantic) seems out of place with the pre-modern naval warfare imagery. So does dashboard red, of course, but that's so shockingly anachronistic that it's awesome and pulls the poem out of distant metaphor into the passenger seat, whereas the iceberg retains the distance of the past without fitting in with the preceding lines. If you could think of another maritime disaster to allude to, you'd have an almost perfect poem. Oh, and to offset my praise, a critique. In the last stanza, the iceberg line (which I assume refers to the Titantic) seems out of place with the pre-modern naval warfare imagery. So does dashboard red, of course, but that’s so shockingly anachronistic that it’s awesome and pulls the poem out of distant metaphor into the passenger seat, whereas the iceberg retains the distance of the past without fitting in with the preceding lines.

If you could think of another maritime disaster to allude to, you’d have an almost perfect poem.

]]> By: daniel http://www.rmfo-blogs.com/daniel/2009/11/30/titan/comment-page-1/#comment-33785 daniel Wed, 27 Oct 2010 15:59:48 +0000 http://www.rmfo-blogs.com/daniel/2009/11/30/titan/#comment-33785 Awesome! Glad I came up with something that sticks in your head. Man, I haven't been back to Creative Convention for a long, long time. I should see what's going on. Anyways... always nice to hear from a fan! Awesome! Glad I came up with something that sticks in your head.

Man, I haven’t been back to Creative Convention for a long, long time. I should see what’s going on.

Anyways… always nice to hear from a fan!

]]> By: Astian http://www.rmfo-blogs.com/daniel/2009/11/30/titan/comment-page-1/#comment-33783 Astian Wed, 27 Oct 2010 14:37:32 +0000 http://www.rmfo-blogs.com/daniel/2009/11/30/titan/#comment-33783 This is really good. I've had a few of the lines stuck in my head since I read it in CC a while ago, but I couldn't remember what poem they were from, so I googled them and lo and behold, it's not T.S. Eliot but a goon! This is really good. I’ve had a few of the lines stuck in my head since I read it in CC a while ago, but I couldn’t remember what poem they were from, so I googled them and lo and behold, it’s not T.S. Eliot but a goon!

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